As a child I would explore the magic there
a hidden world of washed up treasures
string, wood, perhaps an old boot
soft edged sea glass nestled in salted pebbles
and I could lose myself for hours amid
those simple things, incapable of harm
And all the while a secret beckoned with the light
creeping in and calling me from the horizon
to ensure I would return and meet you there one day
clutching love notes scrawled on a brown paper bag
my windswept heart aching in silent anticipation
of a cloudburst of sighs passed between lovers lips
Hidden by the crag edges of the cave
we held steady against the tide, rising fast
’til we let it take us under, and I thought
‘we could go on forever like this’
our bliss suspended in the dark
I felt magic once more, tingling under my skin
Soon after, you were gone, and I couldn’t explain
why the ripples of your touch now trembled at my side
and the black went on forever, my horizon fading
yet still I would come, waiting in the echoes
and once, I thought I saw you there
sunlight dancing shadows at your back
But our tale was cast adrift, and clarity came to call
in the end, as fate’s palm passed you a pittance
and gifted me with riches. And only then could I see
the light, as our son wandered in the low tide
searching for washed up treasures where once
we’d buried a future in an old memory box
Sad and happy thoughts inside the cave- interested in the story and what happened to them………good hook!
Thank you! I loved the picture so thought I would have a play around with it and this is what came out.
Beautiful & moving poem, Vanessa ~ love it! )
Thank you Peter, love that you think so x
………beautiful and though you claim inspiration from the photo, I truly feel a presence beneath the words that resounds much deeper than a black and white memory of paper…….. Lovely, as always, Vanessa. ~ Love, Bobbie
Well bless you for saying so lovely Bobbie, I hoped you’d like this one xx
Very, very, lovely. Exquisitely written! Moved me deep within.
Thank you Emmett, really happy to see you here.
Beautiful way of expression! I am moved! Loved it to every bit 🙂
-Naima.
Thank you so much, very kind of you.
You’re most welcome 🙂
-Naima.
A well told tale, full of magic and longing. Gorgeous!
Thank you Anna, really glad you enjoyed it x
and the cycle closes again…very nice…love the love notes scrawled on a brown paper bag and burrying a future in an old memory box…
Thank you. Thought I would try more of a story telling style with this one!
oy what a emotional end with it all coming round now with the son…some really cool touches in this one…nice story telling for sure….the ripple of touch at your side after they are gone…nice…
If this is all imagination taken from the picture, well done on making it such a wonderful, emotional and very vivid read.
We used to collect all sorts of treasures on our beaches here. I used to make jewelry from the beach glass.
It is all complete fiction and just where my head went with it. Thank you, I’m glad you enjoyed it x
Interesting mix of memories…happy and I’d also say melancholic?….it’s like you were seeing yourself through the eyes of your own child (if that makes sense)…like you could feel those emotions of exploration and discovery…but also in their crept this notion of adulthood…with a sad twist in the end (at least that’s how it made me feel)….it was almost like….why does life have to get spoiled by notions of the real world and the abandonment of ‘childish’ emotions…i’m making no sense am I ….
ah hec, I don’t mind, it’s good to see you back here. How’s the jet lag?! It is a fictional piece, but your interpretation of the emotions and memories within that is spot on.Thanks Stu!
soft edged sea glass nestled in salted pebbles
and I could lose myself for hours amid
those simple things, incapable of harm
LOVE this!! Such excellent writing!!
Oh Hannah, thank you, that really is kind of you. Love it when people pick up on specific lines that speak to them. On my way over to see you shortly.
This is very cool, reading the second time too. Thanks for reposting it. Indeed, the lost loves often haunt us, though rarely with such magic and calm as here. It’s lovely to think what forgiveness bequeaths out spirit.
Thank you, delighted that you came back for another read xx
Very effective(and affecting) narrative poem, with lots of vivid pictures that impress sensations–that’s a cool photograph, but your words give it a real frame of reference and enhance it, I think, past just the image and into a personal place–which is what poetry is all about. Enjoyed it much.
Thank you, that means a lot coming from such a talented lady as you. X
A cave is always deeper, and only as deep as we care to journey. A very brave write with much more meaning than I read at cave’s mouth in the light of day. This piece really touched me in its sincerity. Loved your voice.
Thanks Henry, glad you could hear me within this.
Sad and gorgeous! You gave it life with all the vivid snapshots.
Thank you, really appreciate you saying so.
so many lovely lines… such a melancholy tale… you drew me right into the story. very nice!
Thank you, it was a little slice of seaside fiction, glad you enjoyed it.
Another very well written poem, touching melancholy but very beautiful.
Thank you, really glad you enjoyed it.
Sorry I’m late, V. I was up all night and my brain needed rest. This was a sad, but incredible journey. A well written piece of art, love. ♥ ♥
Wow, thank you Bradley, what a lovely thing to say. It was worth the wait… don’t worry at all x
You’re welcome, and thank you! ♥ 😀
A beautiful, melancholic piece…I was wrapped up in your tale…very moving 🙂 xo
A circle – lovely
Thanks x
Wow Vanessa, with the amount of emotion and clarity of description in that poem I thought it must be something you had lived through. Glad to hear it wasn’t!
But, enjoyed the poem, thanks.
What a wonderful compliment, thank you x
wraps itself around and inside me so well
What a lovely thing to say, thank you.